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Mourning Pieces

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Jan. 30th, 2012 | 08:35 pm

The five short sections may be read in any order you choose. You may read as many or as few of them as you like.


Mourning Pieces I
Mourning Pieces II
Mourning Pieces III
Mourning Pieces IV
Mourning Pieces V

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rt_sparrow

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from: rt_sparrow
date: Jan. 31st, 2012 04:44 am (UTC)
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wow. These are powerful. They make me want to ask you if you're ok.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Jan. 31st, 2012 05:17 am (UTC)
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Thanks - I have good days and bad days :) What I'm struggling with right now is not having free time to mourn. It's such a first world problem, you know? I have this job I LOVE and an AMAZING life, but I haven't had a day off since the 4th, and tonight is my first night home since Thanksgiving, poor me, I went to India and all over the place whine whine, but it has hit the point where it's been stressful not having much private time. I keep finding my dad's death coming up when I don't have any kleenex, or I'm about to start teaching, or I'm on a long car ride with my work colleagues. So I'm waiting for a good time to curl up in my bed and cry for a bit. On the up side, at least I can make some words out of it. And in fairness to my dad, yes I have a hard time thinking of specific instances where he was awesome, but I owe so much of my business sense and ability to have the life and job I have to his encouragement and example--that just wasn't the story I wanted to tell this time. Thanks for listening :)

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from: anonymous
date: Jan. 31st, 2012 05:27 am (UTC)
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This is Todd. These are great. Reading them makes me cry because I was there with you for alot of this and I know. I know how much you loved him, I know you wonder if he loved you back as much, and because I know how much he loved you and how somewhere inside him it pained him because, for some reason he couldnt tell you with that 'meaningful tone' in his voice.

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C.S. Inkheart

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from: frecklestars
date: Jan. 31st, 2012 02:57 pm (UTC)
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Despite not having the time to mourn being a first world problem, it's still a valid concern.

*hughughughughug*

Be well.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 3rd, 2012 09:18 pm (UTC)
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Thanks :) And thanks for reading!

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dblicher

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from: dblicher
date: Jan. 31st, 2012 08:38 pm (UTC)
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I *love* the concept of having to assemble this essay. Amazing use of the prompt.

I am so sorry you haven't had time to mourn; I know how that goes; I swear there's a Toyota Corolla out there with hundreds of hours of screaming in it from a time when I had no privacy. I'm glad you're out and about in your life, and I'm glad you've got a safe place to be when the time comes. Call or write if you need.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 3rd, 2012 09:18 pm (UTC)
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Thanks :) It's good to know you're there - me, too.

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Vice Captain of the Universe

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from: sweeny_todd
date: Feb. 1st, 2012 12:40 am (UTC)
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these are beautiful, powerful snapshots. My heart goes out to you.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 3rd, 2012 09:19 pm (UTC)
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Thank you :)

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when all you know seems so far away

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from: poppetawoppet
date: Feb. 1st, 2012 01:39 am (UTC)
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just wow.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 3rd, 2012 09:19 pm (UTC)
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Thanks for reading - I'm glad I get to make words out of it.

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Bonnie

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from: bonnie_rocks
date: Feb. 1st, 2012 02:50 pm (UTC)
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Very powerful.

~*::Meow::*~

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 3rd, 2012 09:19 pm (UTC)
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Thank you :)

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One Phil to Rule Them All

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from: dslartoo
date: Feb. 1st, 2012 03:08 pm (UTC)
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I tend to get very annoyed with fragmentary writings, but these are well done and do hang together extremely well. Not annoying at all -- instead raw, honest, punchy. Pulling no punches, I mean.

Good stuff -- but then, that's par for the course, for you.

cheers,
Phil

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 3rd, 2012 09:20 pm (UTC)
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Thanks on all counts :) Yeah, I tried to really focus in the editing process that everything had to stand alone, and be strong enough to compensate for the hassle of more clicks! So I'm glad it worked for you.

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Lose 10 Pounds of Ugly Fat...  Cut Off Your Head.

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from: n3m3sis42
date: Feb. 1st, 2012 06:08 pm (UTC)
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This is really well done. I'm sorry for your loss, and while not having time to mourn may be a first-world problem, that doesn't make it any less valid. I hope you find the time you need soon.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 3rd, 2012 09:20 pm (UTC)
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Thank you :)

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Andrea Blythe

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from: blythe025
date: Feb. 2nd, 2012 12:12 am (UTC)
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First, I love how you set this up, as links to posts that can be read or not read and in any order. It's a format that really can only exist in the digital era. Normal books, though they can be flipped through at random, tend to have a kind of linearity, so that people read from beginning to end and one though is deliberately built on another.

Having the ability to choose at random creates a different experience, one which reflects how emotions get jumbled, especially in trying time, such as trying to mourn a father who wasn't perfect. The prose poem would be beautiful if published in a book, too, but has an extra level of depth with the ability to take in each moment in whatever way we choose.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 6th, 2012 02:02 am (UTC)
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Thanks - I'm glad the format worked for you! I spent a fair amount of time making sure each section opened and ended strongly, and had at least one memorable phrase in it. I'm glad, too, that the fragments worked as the expression of the emotion, I was trying for that! And your comment about mourning someone imperfect really hit home :)

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shimmerdream

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from: shimmerdream
date: Feb. 2nd, 2012 12:13 am (UTC)
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This is really well written, and a great use of the prompt. I'm so sorry about the loss of your dad.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 6th, 2012 02:02 am (UTC)
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Thank you, on all counts.

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nodressrehersal

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from: nodressrehersal
date: Feb. 2nd, 2012 02:38 am (UTC)
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All well done.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 6th, 2012 02:02 am (UTC)
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Thanks for stopping by :)

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from: iamthesea
date: Feb. 2nd, 2012 05:51 am (UTC)
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These are so moving and powerful. wonderfully done!

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 6th, 2012 02:02 am (UTC)
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Thank you - I'm glad you read!

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Pika the Brazen Ninja

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from: porn_this_way
date: Feb. 2nd, 2012 06:30 am (UTC)
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Powerful, raw, and real. The way you set this up was perfect, both for the writings themselves, and the prompt.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 6th, 2012 02:03 am (UTC)
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Thanks! I was trying to hit that on both levels, and I'm glad you found it successful.

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Holly

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from: minnesattva
date: Feb. 2nd, 2012 04:18 pm (UTC)
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The fragmentary nature is very much like mourning; it seems to me to happen all in pieces. What I remember best of the most vivid mourning I have done in my life is similarly written down in little bits throughout my LJ: the feel of my mom's coat, a CD I can't listen to any more, entire ice floes of memories, from which big bergs sometimes break off and lurk in the depths to tear a hole in my side.

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whipchick

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from: whipchick
date: Feb. 6th, 2012 02:03 am (UTC)
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Yeah. This. Great metaphor, too - thank you!

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